story that is under production (undead story

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story that is under production (undead story

Postby Bunnytots » Mon Nov 10, 2008 2:43 pm

It was cold inside the room. Turning over he tried to keep out the fires of his nightmares and the cold of the world around him. Why was it so damn cold? He muttered to himself as he debated whether or not to get up and get another blanket. In the end he decided to get one more. As he opened his eyes, and in the dim lights it seemed as though he could see bones in his arms. Dismissing it as a lingering part of his nightmare he swung his feet over the edge of the bed. When he did so, he realized he was not in his home, but a sparsely lit tomb.

As the revalition hit, he could here someone walking down the stairs. Frightened, he searched the small room for a weapon to defend himself with. With nothing in sight, he tried to call the Light to defend him. A long time passed and nothing happened, so he raised his fists in a small act of defiance towards whatever was coming down into the tomb.

hmmm yeah thats about 5 mins of writing right there, im writing more as we speak, but truly until i can edit it more, the next 5 paragraphs ive written wont be on here for a weee bit.

i do have a name for the character, but that comes in the next paragraph. as u can guess the undead was a paladin. prolly more tomorrow if i get around to it.
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Postby Bobson » Tue Nov 11, 2008 4:18 am

I dunno, I can't really come with an opinion before I get more, but you are surely into some of the right :)
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Postby Bunnytots » Tue Nov 11, 2008 5:49 am

ty. i have a busy day today school wise so i cant write that much. maybe in algebra 2 since i got all of today and tomorrows homework done.

but like i said, i have to revise alittle because i forgot to describe a few characters so far. and its now going to tribute wotlk once i hit 80 and can get a good background info base other than wowwiki.
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Postby Mysteria » Tue Nov 11, 2008 7:24 am

i voted before read the story :lol:
so far,so good,so what?
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Postby Bunnytots » Tue Nov 11, 2008 11:55 am

Mysteria wrote:i voted before read the story :lol:

pfft. do u still like it? ill be adding more tonight.
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Postby Bunnytots » Tue Nov 11, 2008 1:04 pm

A ragged cowled figure along with an elf walked slowly down the stairs. To him it seemed to take them forever to reach the bottom. When they finally did, he couldn’t move at all. With what seemed like deliberate slowness, the figure moved his cowl. Even in the little light his yellow eyes shone. The elf waved its one arm in the air and a fire appeared in the middle of the room. Although the fire was almost directly at his feet, he couldn’t feel the heat at all. He looked at the two newcomers and saw how disfigured they were.

The man who removed his cowl had a spider crawl out of the hole where his nose was supposed to be. A further investigation revealed that a knife was plunged in his gut and a majority of his left arm was bone. The elf was a female, and high elven by the looks of it. One arm was battened off at the shoulder, and both her cheeks were missing random patches of skin. Unlike her companion, her skin was dark blue instead of green. Both were starting to decay, but the man was more decayed.

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Postby Bobson » Thu Nov 13, 2008 5:38 am

Cool! I like it now! :D

But it seems like you are looking from the man's (Arthur?) perspective ... if you are, how does he know that it's a man and an elf coming down the stairs? ...

That was all the constructive critic about the story ... for now :twisted:

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Postby kozom1234 » Thu Nov 13, 2008 3:02 pm

possible character lore section????

if i had an undead here be his lore

was a human

was a janitor

slipped in puke

died.

puke was magic

undead.


XD

my gnome dk choked on some bad sushi XD
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Postby Bunnytots » Fri Nov 14, 2008 6:54 am

well thanks for reading, right now im too busy on wrath to write more.

grrrrrrrrrr....... someone said no.
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Postby kozom1234 » Fri Nov 14, 2008 12:26 pm

they iz a h8r hu just clicks no before reading. or a 5 year old alli who h8s all horde lore
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Postby Bunnytots » Fri Nov 14, 2008 7:07 pm

well so far what ive written is horde view right now. i plan on mixing it up alittle bit so its both sides that way its a totally new view.

ps. i might post a few paragraphs next week when i have more time to, school work and my deathknight named squeekers has been taking up most of my time.

pss. i will prolly post my dk along with my stor laters.
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Postby Bunnytots » Thu Nov 20, 2008 5:48 am

YAYAYAYAYAY! this story got dropped because i became too distracted... starting a dk story now.
will prolly be in the same topic though
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Postby Ichibi » Thu Nov 20, 2008 9:54 am

kozom1234 wrote:they iz a h8r hu just clicks no before reading. or a 5 year old alli who h8s all horde lore


Hey! I'm not 5!

Just kidding, I voted "Yes"
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Postby Bunnytots » Thu Nov 20, 2008 12:11 pm

well i found my flash drive which had the story on it i will post it later
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Postby kozom1234 » Thu Nov 20, 2008 3:02 pm

Ichibi wrote:
kozom1234 wrote:they iz a h8r hu just clicks no before reading. or a 5 year old alli who h8s all horde lore


Hey! I'm not 5!

Just kidding, I voted "Yes"



*puts away hatchet*

good call :P

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